Tuesday, December 15, 2015

Coma Comments

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lingering memories in a coma,
Of the moon shining so bright,
Gazing brightly in the dark skies,
The galaxy bearing witness,
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Anzelyne shideshe
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Bri Edwards 30 June 2018

(cont.) .. respire? (maybe perspire i thought) i 'had to' look up respire, thinking breathe. i found this: verb: respire breathe. & (of a plant) : carry out respiration, especially at night when photosynthesis has ceased. & literary: recover hope, courage, or strength after a time of difficulty. great PHOTO! photoshopped? bri ;)

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Anzelyne Shideshe 01 July 2018

Thanks for lending your third eye stay blessed @Bri Edwards

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Bri Edwards 30 June 2018

From the perpelexion of our touch, Might you MEAN perplexion? ? : Perplexion dictionary definition | perplexion defined - YourDictionary perplexion. Noun. (plural perplexions) Condition or state of being perplex; perplexity. A sleep we fell, ............perhaps Asleep? or A sleep we felt? (cont.) ..

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Anzelyne Shideshe 01 July 2018

Thanks for editing

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Anzelyne Shideshe 01 July 2018

Perplexion you right, but A sleep we fell I.e it is an expression of instantly falling into a coma not the normal sleeping experience, Respire giving it a thought you right but I used it just to emphasize on breathing as the main Verb.

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Edward Kofi Louis 21 May 2016

Breathless it was! Thanks for sharing this poem with us.

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Anzelyne Shideshe 05 November 2016

Love and tragedy what a mystery

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Paul Amrod 21 December 2015

Hi Anzelyne, I am gone through a lot of editing of my earlier works and now have to read this wonderful piece of yours. Magically magneted to the feel, Breathless it was, A heart attack we thought, A sleep we fell, Forever in a coma of romance, It's harness makes us respire, Ever in a coma of love This is a wonderfully seductive and sensual passage, Nice, marvelous! , Paul

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Anzelyne Shideshe 21 December 2015

Thanks Paul for your wonderful thoughts.I'm humbled.

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Anzelyne Shideshe 21 December 2015

Thanks for your wonderful thoughts.I'm humbled.

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Anil Kumar Panda 16 December 2015

Beautiful poetry. I can feel the essence sitting here.

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Anzelyne Shideshe 16 December 2015

Thanks for your thoughts.

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Ernest Makuakua 16 December 2015

BEAUTIFUL LOVE PIECE

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Anzelyne Shideshe 16 December 2015

Thanks Ernest I'm humbled

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Ernest Makuakua 16 December 2015

wonderful poem i like it

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