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deeply and meaningfull.posted 10 surya

It's truly amazing, but women float face up when they drown

Wow Alyssa, this is amazing. Not exactly what I expected from you, but the surprise was half the fun. Beaufitul imagery, it kept me hooked till the very end.

Haha you were right about your poems being very dark and deathy. The imagery is great, and your ending is perfect. The flow is nice, and the diction is fantastic. The syntax could be more malleable, but overall this is amazing. I don't really understand the 'Ora', unless you mean 'aura', like the energy surrounding an object or him? But other than that this is totally awesome, I love it.