i can see the muscles strain on your
back when you lay alongside me, they
look like rib cages and i lay there too
and envisage that when you sleep i could
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good writer, , you r.. continue.. write brighter
it's good, straight to the point, very descriptive and powerful emotions, i almost felt someone clutching my heart by the time i've finished, good write x
i would inhale deeply making your heart in sync with my notions what a flowing dream, what a winding expression :)
You dont beat about the bush in your poems. This one is very intense- I would even say metaphysical if I understand the word properly.Thanks for letting me in to your treasury and you would be welcome in mine. Just click on the door.
Provocative, but an incredibly detailed description of becoming one with another. The words flow quickly and efficiently, capturing the effortlessness that went into creating this poem. The title, 'clutching, ' really paints the scene and your narrative acts it out. Well done.
Raunchy to say the least Chloe, but very well written. Warmly, Jerry
Like I mentioned earlier about the twilight zone....erogenous zone....whatever.....under the circumstances, concealed thoughts are less frightening.... Cheers. Subroto