Saturday, July 11, 2009

Clutching Comments

Rating: 4.9

i can see the muscles strain on your
back when you lay alongside me, they
look like rib cages and i lay there too
and envisage that when you sleep i could
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chloe young
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Subroto Chatterjee 15 August 2009

Like I mentioned earlier about the twilight zone....erogenous zone....whatever.....under the circumstances, concealed thoughts are less frightening.... Cheers. Subroto

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good writer, , you r.. continue.. write brighter

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shirley bassett 23 July 2009

it's good, straight to the point, very descriptive and powerful emotions, i almost felt someone clutching my heart by the time i've finished, good write x

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i would inhale deeply making your heart in sync with my notions what a flowing dream, what a winding expression :)

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Matt Mooney 18 July 2009

You dont beat about the bush in your poems. This one is very intense- I would even say metaphysical if I understand the word properly.Thanks for letting me in to your treasury and you would be welcome in mine. Just click on the door.

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Kale Beaudry 14 July 2009

Provocative, but an incredibly detailed description of becoming one with another. The words flow quickly and efficiently, capturing the effortlessness that went into creating this poem. The title, 'clutching, ' really paints the scene and your narrative acts it out. Well done.

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Jerry Hughes 11 July 2009

Raunchy to say the least Chloe, but very well written. Warmly, Jerry

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