Saturday, July 31, 2021

Clown Comments

Rating: 3.5

Paint me a smile on my sad face
A tear that I cant trace, Erase,
I want to pick up the pace and race
But I'm limping.
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Marvin Reeds
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Luis A. Estable 31 July 2021

Yes, this person is in pain. The first verse wants a smile, but the second asks for a tear. The logic here is mixed. Though this shows anguish, I don`t attack the feeling, but the poetry could be a better excellence.

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