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Penned with brilliance, woven together with eloquence. Lovely work.

“Fear is as absent as you today”, in Joe Satriani’ Flying in the blue dream there come a passage which I thought will never be enslaved by words …. No more

brilliant! keep writing! could you read my poems too? thank you.

This is indeed a lovely poem, Christine, but I would like to see what you would do with it if you decided to go with the rhyme pattern which is present throughout much of your poem. My opinion would be to either go with free verse and use an occasional inner rhyme or go with a consistent meter and rhyme. The way it is caused me to stumble over the lines quite a few times. Your immagery is beautiful and completely understandable. If you try a change to this poem, I predict you may like it better. Raynette

This was absolutely beautiful, Christine. THIS is what I consider to be great free verse, though you also utilize some rhymes, half-rhymes, and assonance with the flow of a true poet. This was a pleasure to read, and I'm anxious to mine more of your work, for I'm a rhyming poet but I have a deep appreciation for this kind of heartfelt endeavor. Wonderful work.