Clouds Gathering Comments

Extremely powerful in its gentle flow that grows gradually troubled like a stream suddenly rippling over pebbles and then rocks and then boulders come in view. Oh, I am now a Charles Simic fan with this poem!

A slow flow of emotions in a cozy soliloquy. Enjoyed reading. Thanks for sharing.

It is this presentiment that gives the poem perfect balance. Without it, our happy moments would lack their deeper sense.

third stanza is a clunker too. I would omit it, if I could. Lucy

I think the poem falters in the second stanza. The first stanza is perfect. The first line of the 2nd stanza is perhaps clunky. I think a metaphor is needed here and not a simile. The last line is striking. The poem isn't perfect in my estimation and I like many of Simic's poems. Lucy

I don't read the New Yorker, but this poem does not impact me in any way. I think it is average at best.

a new yorkerish poem