Cloudburst. Comments

Good poem, well done.

I am honored that you saw fit to change your words just because I found them confusing. Bless you. Love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥

Ah - - as way of apology for using too much poetic licence Allie, I have now adjusted the final line to make more sense to faraway summery friends like you - - - - - thanks for pointing out the obscurity - - love and hugs from Fay,

I particularly enjoyed your 'shouldering' and the 'mushrooms' of clouds - great metaphors and the way you have personalized these wonder's of the natural world as if they were players in an epic drama or even a football match. Your final couplet confuses though. I've never heard of 'hailey javelins'? Not that it matters. The poem works a treat. Love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥

lovely fay clouds are fascinating you bring them to life 10

Tomorrow may choose to unskirt this storm, But for now hailey javelins must be borne. ................................................. Good, Hope now all, Fay. 10... Tsira

Great Poem. Christmas Weather Bah Humbug! Regards Steve

GODS feet walk in the clouds