Thursday, August 30, 2007

Cloaked Venom Comments

Rating: 4.8

Your eyes hypnotise me,
Your presence takes my breath away,
Then you smile
And I’ll do anything to make you stay.
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Original Unknown Girl 04 September 2007

I love this poem, it's got fantastic rythym and it's got a clear and concise message. Sometimes it does feel like an addiction and you calling it poison is as close to that kind of addiction I could imagine. The metaphor works well. Love the close-out too, I love full moons..... it was a Lunar Eclipse this time too, so perhaps the ache in your heart was somewhat heavier. It resonates deeply. Great poem. HG: -) xx

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