City Planning Comments

Well the idea is interesting- don't think the enjambments work. Whilst the Orwell reference adds a sinister tone it might have worked better to extend this metaphor further.

This is excellent. An enjoyable and thought-provoking read.

Michael, This poem is so thought provoking. Really enjoyed reading this. Honestly I nearly called a friend of mine who is a planner to ask if I could check out his computer thought I may like one of those ;) A pleasure to read you. Carol

This is so creative, Michael, with very powerful messages. Chrissie

OOOOO, pithy, a subject that enrages me, good read