Christmas Time Comments

This gave me goosebumps Brittainie... The mood is set right away, wonderful. Perhaps you could break up the first few lines? 'His head hung low as he stood with his family waiting to see Santa. His heart sank as he listened to his children whisper their Christmas wishes, Knowing full well that they would not receive what they wanted from Santa' They are a bit long and while you have lines half the size it is just a tiny bit disruptive to the flow. I love the details you added: 'blue colored eyes' But the last line truly pulled everything together finely. I like the insight it adds to the father.