Wednesday, April 30, 2008

Choices Comments

Rating: 4.8

I was curious,
What it would be like?
To drink allot,
And I was psyched,
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Aden Orie
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meerkat 09 November 2021

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Amber S 08 October 2011

great poem very true but everyone makes mistakes. :) so your not alone.

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Royàlé Dì 08 October 2011

Alot said in few words..i lyk!

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Chatara Conway 23 April 2009

Choices are big in life and your poem shows that.

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Choices are the stuff of which life is made. Simple but substantive. Keep writing.

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Aijaz Asif 13 October 2008

beautiful, simple and deep write, i like it thanx for sharing 10

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Hana K 13 May 2008

hehe... here i come... nice poem, clear and simple

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Roger Bowman 08 May 2008

Simple clear and cool Aden R

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Annie Girl 08 May 2008

i can relate to it but any way nice poem. :)

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Geramie White 05 May 2008

Short, but a very good stament. I wouldn't be surprised if it was used for an anti-drug commercial.

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Monkey Mendez 05 May 2008

I've thought about going that way a few times, but I never actually did it. (I always wanted to black out) Nice work! C:

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svetlana savrasova 05 May 2008

love it more please 10 fm me

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Maddie Bird 04 May 2008

It's an amazing poem. It speaks so much through so little. I believe in constructive crittsicm, so I thought I'd just point out a couple of spelling mistakes if that's okay with you. 'i was curious, of what it whould be like, ' should be 'i was curious, of what it would be like, ' (would is without an ‘h’) and “to drink alot, and i was siked, ' should be 'to drink alot, and i was psyched, ' But other than that, it was great, really great.

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Vidi Writes 02 May 2008

Its said that - 'While we are free to choose our actions, we are not free to choose the consequences of our actions.” Your poem is about the Choice and its Consequence. Short and sweet. All the best.

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Howard Johnson 02 May 2008

A excellent hakiu with a powerful thought

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Rajaram Ramachandran 01 May 2008

A realization on the right path-well said in brief.

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Connie Chambers 01 May 2008

this is so good i have never read such pain i love it

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