Child's Sleep Comments

An excellent poem dear Sandy Player! You have chosen a theme rare and have spoken out yourself in a meticulous way. All the best ahead Mr Player

Beautiful descriptions. I'm a sucker for an amazing ending and this piece has one. I love love love the concluding verse. It makes me think of waking and feeling heavy with tears or a 'salt sea'. Not sure if that is your meaning but I enjoyed the interpretation and feeling I took away from it. Verse 3 seems to have a vunerability to it. The rest of the verses taken more as an observation, a detailed account. But verse 3 you get me. every time. those two lines just seem to ache. Nice title as well.