Child At War Comments

ppl write the way they wanna write dont let ppl tell u ur doin it wrong this my favorite poem keep on writin

Nice doing on depicting a cruel situation. Love this poem...

a situation brought out very well...your poem makes it very live...the helplessness, the pain all of it

Nice use of imagery, fits well with the content. One little thing I would recommend is maybe just making sure that your work is gramatically correct, such as using commas to make your sentences clearer and flow better. For example, changing 'I wanna change this wish I could go back' to 'I wanna change this, wish I could go back'. All in all, another very good piece and I hope to hear more from you.