Chasm Comments

building dreams to crumble after

Images are so clear that I want to go out and look for some of those 'crumpled gliders'

Beautifully done Mary.

really gorgeous choice of words, images and sentiment. thank you

Masterly in construction and delivery

The images you create a simply majestic. Thanks.

I liked these rhymes and use of repeted consonants. Whether under full faced Moon Or tiny silver slivered smile Moonlit, Moonless Starlit, Starless, Paper planes I launch An original way of presenting your thoughts and wishes.

Charmingly fresh metaphor. The rhythm and language flow beautifully.

thank you for this poem. i could really relate to it as a reader.

Nice thoughts sounds like a relationship that is also on the edge... hope it surrvived.

Thanks for sharing it