Saturday, November 24, 2007

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Un-colour the sound of the darkened sea;
to leave it outlined in white.
Let the fire-blackened globe
continue to probe
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Peter Jones
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Sonny Rainshine 24 November 2007

Excellent example of how rhyme can dazzle when used with finesse. Beautifully cadenced and presented. Great lines 'poppyfield of flowers' describing the clusters of stars and 'visions of noise...decoys' is a remarkable phrase. Cheers.

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