melted snow crawls at a snails
pace down his threadless, stinking
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Outstanding John. I concur with Wendy. Thank you so much for putting your work on this site. I can see, from this piece alone, that you are a force to be reckoned with. Anyone who can drag out meaning with such a skillfull use of words and spacing is a real artist.
you stay away from cliches-to me this is the piece with the most original images and the strongest human content. I would fine tune a bit, but I think I'm imposing my own editing skills and personality-. A fine write.