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Can we fly up in the sky so high at night? A lot of fireflies will form a retinue for us during our flight In the wings of white nimbus clouds which are drifting near by moon. so fine and wonderful poetic imagination. superb write. thank you

One of the best love poems I have read! Great flow of thoughts and feelings with rhythmic verses. The fire of love never dies. I like all the beautiful verses and these lines are touched me most: Tell me, who is beautiful me or moon? The smile on your face has delivered me The exact answer what I wanted. You must keep on writing! Give to the world what you have - the gift of writing.

highly emotional romantic poem with deep sensation of love- every one will attract in its flame

A poem seems to be taken up the theme of romanticism in well written words of creativity and perfection and I like this poem as such. well done by the poet.

A beautiful write. love your ink.

As the melodious singing bird of the Western Ghats, Mrs. Valsa George has commented, this is a poem of intense emotions of love. Imagination takes flight to swim around the moon. When we read the lines we feel a rhythm, may be iambic/trochaic or a combination of both. I think little care must be taken in the use of a few words like 'abstain'. This is a marvellous poem on love.

Can I stand so close to lean on you? Then a pair of rhythmic heartbeats will turn into a single note! This is what we call Love.... two hearts with one song.... A beautiful love poem! Thanks for your comment on my 300th poem.

Excellent writing!

Dear Mallika, A lovely poem with deep feelings of love I liked it Thanks! ............................... 'Destination Of Love' ................................... Please Reply.

Can I stand so close to lean on you? Then a pair of rhythmic heartbeats will turn into a single note! .........................i especially enjoyed these lines. also these lines: When all the glory of the youth may bade farewell to my body, ...........but i would use bid instead of bade Shiny hair may turn black to grey And the vigor in me may Get diminished day by day to a great extent. ....................you seem optimistic......that these things only may happen! if you live long enough, i think they assuredly will! but you've still got a few years ahead of you before then (if your PH photo was recently taken) ! ! mallika, i will need a lot more time to comment fully on your poem. suffice it to say, you know a lot of english words (some i don't know, or know well) , and the grammar is pretty good. but i bet this would seem more polished if written in whatever-your-first language-is, and i wish i could read it in that language also. alas, i mostly know only english and not as well as some know it! thanks for sharing. i will try to find time in the future to comment more fully in a personal message. remind me if i don't do so in the next week. bri :)

Here but for you I am I can feel the sweet breeze move through the trees yes I can.....iip

Thank you for inviting me to read this beautiful poem of yours. Your poem is replete with love, and the sense of this heavenly feeling made my day. 'Now you are far off from myself And I don't think we could meet in this life once again! Though I can feel your mere presence In each and every step I take.' - Poignant feelings. Separation is sad, but when one nourishes such tender feelings even when separated, with no possibility to reunite, I would infer, blessed is he, and blessed you are, to have been 'in love'. 'Can you visualize the similar beauty Even then, in me same as now my dear? Will you keep the romance alive Till the last day when I die? ' - Regarding this apprehension of yours, I have a poem titled 'Her Fears' - you may like to read and comment.