Friday, April 24, 2009

C@ptured He@rt Comments

Rating: 3.8

I still remember a things or a few,
the glow on your face when you said, 'I LOVE YOU.'
Take care of yourself you always used to tell,
that twinkle in your eyes, your smile I remember so well.
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tanvi damle
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Libbie Jones 28 April 2009

Here i am thinking about how i feel towards this guy that I've fallen madly for and you basically said it all.. Its funny how little things work out like that..=) I like it alot.. keep up the good work.. You have talent!

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Tom Golding 27 April 2009

Sincere and from the heart.

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<font color =fusha>Amy 27 April 2009

great poem Straight from the heart

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Dr Hitesh Sheth 26 April 2009

cuz i manage to see you everywhere, every place................. a true love poem..........

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Noel Horlanda 26 April 2009

In the beginning rough sailing, I mean rhyming seemed rough but in the next lines down to the last it went smoothly and fine...10+

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Indira Babbellapati 25 April 2009

gr8 love poem from a teenage heart! helps me understand my son also of same age!

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Leslie Xavier 25 April 2009

Hi Tanvi, words flowing straight from within you. I could feel that, feel the love, the pain... Something I can fully identify with... Keep expressing 10

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Kale Beaudry 24 April 2009

It wasn't bad, but it wasn't anything special. To me, it just came across as another generic mainstream love song that you hear everyday on the radio.. not really a poem at all, unless you count the rhyming (which I don't) . Speaking of which, In almost every poem under your name the rhyme scheme is the same... AABBAABB... which means you sincerely need to break away and try something different. The mistakes in this threw me off as well, and inhibited me from regarding this as an expertly written piece. Perhaps put a little bit more time into editing your stuff to give it that professional look. Like I said, it wasn't bad, but it didn't make me think. You have the potential, please use it; break away.

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MuRdA RhEE 24 April 2009

beautiful writing** 10***

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Naidz Ladia 24 April 2009

title and contents complments each other...rhming of words are nice to read..this piece is very beautiful.. naizz

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a wonderful poem filled by beautiful images and music..enjoyed it

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Kesav Easwaran 24 April 2009

'From the first kiss to the very last rose, I remember the way you tickled my nose. I never wanted to with you ever fight, I just wanted to be held in your arms tight! '... sincere love overflows in these lines...excellent monologue on love that pains...good work, Tanvi...10

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Chitra - 24 April 2009

a genuine warm write..10 for your poem

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this poem deserves a 10+++

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Zakk Burck 24 April 2009

Aww this poem's amazing :)

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C. P. Sharma 24 April 2009

a great love poem with genius touches. CP

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Mel Vincent Basconcillo 24 April 2009

this is truly marvelous and beautiful great write my friend! u brilliant and amazing!

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who left whom i dont know...as a person in the same shoe..i only wish a good luck to your hope

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who left whom i dont know...as a person in the same shoe..i only wish a good luck to your hope

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who left whom i dont know...as a person in the same shoe..i only wish a good luck to your hope

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