C.O.M.M.E.R.C.I.A.L. (C) 1-14-10 Comments

Rigth Corey, very right. I stopped looking tv myself, but the news on the intenet is taking as much a ride wih reality as tv. An advantage of internet, you can read some of the outrageous reader's comments immediately below the article. I was really happy to read such a mature poem with such giant insight from a 17 year old. Keep it up man, never let your ideals down, you can make a positive difference in this world.

Hi Corey - A megapoem - I am pleased to be the first to have the temerity to comment. I see this epic as a Protest Poem against 2st C - Commercialism. There are key statements about or complacency (the k is no better than the USA) L 11 'But your day is ruined becauseyou broke your Ipod' L 22 'Because everybody always wanna keep up with the Jones'' L 31 Instead we listen to Lil Wayne to see if what he's sayin makes sense'. L 46 The only thing that's guarnteeed in this world - is that nothing is guaranteed. Lines 1 - 10 are a protest against Child Labour i Africa and China. In lines 12 - 21 the 'hard labour' of people in the Gem Trade is highlighted. Lines 22 - 30 emphasise how the media (news) demands killing for it to feed on and not just injury. We live in a very violent age. In lines 32 - 45 you expose the sexploitation of young bodies and young minds.and you make the point that in or time we all got sucked in. In the closing lines you focu the blame on a maliciuos media as the source of much infromation imbibed by undicriminatory adolescent. 'cut off media maliciuoness - expose real censored issues American lids - the real form of Commercial. Well done a very powerfu protest poem - thanks for sharing some of your ideas - Yours in poetry - JOHN.