Butterfly Tattoo Comments

i disagree with Raynette...the only thing you should redo is 'by tomorrow dawn'-'tomorrow' needs an apostrophe s...i get what you're saying on the 2nd stanza...life is short, so let's go out with a bang. I think it's beautiful. eni da kid

I like the beginning and the ending of this, but I think you need to redo stanza two. There is a typo on the first line of stanza two and the second line seems to need work. The middle stanza needs clarification. If it were in the midst of war, I understand the need to worry about death...but it is such a tender, peaceful scene...just a thought, Uriah. Raynette

i think i love this in a certain way.