Saturday, June 23, 2007

Butterfly Room Comments

Rating: 5.0

Wearied by loneliness
And grasping at straws
In the tidal wave of emotions,
We agree to meet at the city zoo,
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COMMENTS
Bell Song 26 June 2007

Beautiful as always but this poem needs to be reworked in the second line, words like 'grasping at staws' have no place in your writing. Nonetheless 10+

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Sandra Fowler 26 June 2007

What a lovely mood for a summer afternoon. The essence of a moment captured, as fragile and as fleeting as a butterfly. Take care. Warm regards, Sandra

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