Butterfly Effect Comments

Awsome.

Once just the first breath of mine growing into a turbulent typhoon swept across the wide continent with its boisterous billow.. Very nice one sir, Excellent expressions....

in immense ignorance, Want to flout my abiding impulse in a sheer negligence as the trivial flutter of a trifling butterfly? .......................... butterfly still holds the art by the colors art yet never flouts redolence of impulse, wonderful write by metaphors and imagery yet ingenious 10, thanks for sharing

aha! appriciated job, i like every piece well done there Luwi

Ammmmmmmazing indeed! a fine compact emblemetic expressions! 10+

Well Harun, I'm not going to candycoat this like the others have but consider this: You will benefit more by punctuation. Although lines runovers (without capitals) work well if used sparingly...your ideas run into themselves thus creating poetic blockage. The title is cliche...change that if I were you plus break your stanzas up a bit more so my eyes can handle reading them easier. When you've done that task then message me and I'll give you my opinion on the content. Rob

For my taste, you use rather a lot of old-style language ('did send forth' for 'sent forth'; 'held was its trace' for 'its trace was held') , and a lot of words that many readers would need to look up in their dictionaries. BUT you obviously love the sound of words and the flow of language, and this is a great advantage for a poet. And phrases like 'the trivial flutter of a trifling butterfly' show that you have a good control of words. A very promising start in PH.

It's great! Get's you thinking! 10!

wow your poem is amazing! i love how you discribe just what you are in terms of a difference. keep writing!

Well done! Lovely imagery! 10!

Original theme! Very complex thinking in this poem, makes you think! Great poem!

This is good and well written -Great job.10+++

wow, Im speechless, well the title is very attractive, and the poem ois well written, brilliant and evocative, you had a unique idea in mind and you managed to express it and deliver it to the reader vey well, I loved your convincing tone and the flow of your words, Im still impressed, very well done :)

Thoughts provoking finely crafted piece with a beautiful title. Cheers,10+++