Bryan On Paternity Leave Comments

Sheeya, Though I DID not agree with everything in your poem (the English in places) , I feel the poem's story and your presentation of it deserves at least 4 stars. [and some mead? ] ;) bri

(cont.) 'George has been on a short leash with his husband ever since he gambled away their life savings at a poker match.' bri ;)

As an acknowledgement of more acceptance, or at least more a legality and acknowledgement of 'gay marriages', here is a definition from the site: The Free Dictionary: (cont.)

Yes! ! ! 'On the brink' of a divorce or at least a 'short leash'. 'Short leash': from The Free Dictionary: 'short leash....A phrase that highlights one's lack of independence or autonomy due to being strongly controlled by another.'

stanza 5: While I think I'd never heard the word 'meed': 'Meed definition, a reward or recompense.', I HAVE HEARD of 'mead': 'Mead, or 'honey wine, ' is an alcoholic beverage made by fermenting honey.' Maybe ''wife' would enjoy a drink? : ) bri

stanza 4: I don't understand what it means to play cards with no flaw. Well, maybe I DO, but I'd, again, not try TOO HARD for a rhyme, as the poem may suffer for it.

(cont.) Though you will lose one rhyme, I suggest, as an example of how to express the wife's feeling(s) , using 'and soon her patience began to lessen'

stanza 3, line 3: Because 'wean' 'is a transitive verb (needs an object) I'm NOT SURE how you can use it here. I'd try NOT USING 'wean'. See next comment. (cont.)

GRAFT: (noun; one definition) 'Graft is the personal gain or advantage earned by an individual at the expense of others as a result of the exploitation of the singular status of, or an influential relationship with, another who has a position of public trust or confidence.

stanza 1: I enjoyed first lines but do not understand: 'while he enjoyed his friend's company in vain.' stanza 2: Again, the last line I question. See my pasted definition of 'graft' as you MIGHT be using it.

I hope it is not Bri or aka Brian Edward. I am not sure how to spend paternity leave before this now now I think I can enjoy it as Holidays (HOLY Days)

Great way to enjoy leave. Nicely written hope it is nothing to do with your personal experience.

I would have Brian not only changing nappies but scraping and washing nappies