Saturday, August 15, 2020

Broken Star Comments

Rating: 5.0

Once upon a time I went fishing for the moon
But I learned you had to dig for it with a silver spoon
A patent platinum pickax and a chartered gold balloon
Always slipping one small step from reaching purple noon
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Kevin Patrick
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Soran M. H 28 August 2020

Just another broken star sloughing headlong, alone the bitter sowed

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Soran M. H 28 August 2020

this masterpiece of work is so deep and very well penned, it leads us to different interpretations and understandings: the moon in the first stanza then the night in the 2nd, the star in 3rd and 4th, dramatically painting the hope in the dark space ending up such a broken star, it is so beautiful creativity imagery, it deserves 10++ and onto my list... well done and thanks dear Kevin

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Soran M. H 28 August 2020

congratulation, I haven't found these 3 amazing poetic imagery and similes any where else, it has made only by our professional poet Kevin from his creative laboratory mind: 1-poverty of gravity for my astral appetite 2-The mountains of all my dreams 3- hollowed dark plateau ..... note: needs more readings

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Mj Lemon 23 August 2020

Amazing, Kevin. Poverty and aspirations. You make me wonder, do the really wealthy, the top 1%, even need to dream? Do they even value the 'silver, ' or is it what they use to stoke our passions? This poem is invaluable commentary....to myfavourites....

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Lodigiana Poetess 16 August 2020

A wonderfully descriptive piece that was a joy to read! Lodigiana x

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Aniruddha Pathak 15 August 2020

Broken Star... Lovely imagery on exploration.

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Leeann Azzopardi 15 August 2020

Kevin, I love symbolism of this poem. It reminds me of the struggle one has to pursue a dream Bravo! Encore! Encore!

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Ace Of Black Hearts 15 August 2020

Excellent poem, when the expectation are high in a dream that's nigh. Searching for a thirst to quench can leave us only more dry. Parched and we can not stand still in a moment that leaves us wanting or empty inside. We must head for the next distant sun rise. Because otherwise we will never be satisfied.

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