Broken Pieces Of A Smile Comments

good job :) i know your pain, i can feel it when i read it

I really like this poem, just focus your thoughts a little more and you'll be greater because of it. You have a talent, feed that :) cheers

That was really good. You should keep writing becasue one day you will a great poet. Great job =)

i almost wanted to cry but great poem! !

touching. however im with crisa earley. it is very touching though.

I find this poem amazing: ]

Its good, It has a depth to it. If you were going for feeling you have acheived your goal; however, your rhythm is off. Try fixing your gramatical structure, add commas, semicolons, ect. Without it it reads almost as if its a list opposed to a poem. Adding commas, ect. will creat pauses giving the reader a chance to absorb what you, the poet, is trying to say.

I knew it! It was going to sound good. This is so touching.

It has spirit to it. That's almost what I feel about my exboyfriend now

awwwwww thts so cute and depressing a little bit but cute keep on writting i cant wait to read more