Wednesday, November 28, 2012

Broken Pieces Comments

Rating: 5.0

Rainy grey days, appears like the sky is falling down,
All around the mystical splendour of Killeen Castle,
Horses grazing on it's fine fertile pastures,
Ancient, patient, enraptured and captured,
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Hazel Durham
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Ramesh Rai 06 September 2016

The song, was an elusive combination of love and hate, Too late, my persona shattered into tiny broken pieces, That was my fate. What is lotted can not be blotted but we can not erase our past from the canvas of our life.

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Elisabeth Wingle 10 November 2015

The only foes were ourselves. I love that line. I think most of us have had lost love in our lives Sometime we can't quite understand what happened. Sometime I think we are not supposed to. Lovely poem

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Akhtar Jawad 14 March 2015

No time to dance, our chance of a dream life gone, The song, was an elusive combination of love and hate, Too late, my persona shattered into tiny broken pieces, That was my fate. It's beauty of words and thoughts..................10

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Yash Shinde 04 April 2014

these lines are filled with passion, love, pain and vivid imagery...............wonderful write Hazel........

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Mike Barrett 03 January 2014

A beautiful write.....so long as the joys of life outnumber the pain, so long as pain teaches us something, we've lost nothing and gained much - compassion and empathy are two of pain's gifts! I truly enjoy your work!

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Geetha Jayakumar 02 August 2013

Excellent poem...Each lines are so well written. Loved reading it.. Beautiful poem. I seek your Blessings on my completion of 100 poems..Thank you.

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Marcus Mckinley 02 July 2013

love and admiration are a cold commodity among these castle walls when the heart tolls silently. nicely done

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Wahab Abdul 22 May 2013

excellent poetry, no need to say more or i am speechless to to utter any words.! .. however enjoyed fully..

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Sandy Player 24 December 2012

It's painful to see the inevitable coming early in the poem and then it being obvious and unavoidable at the ending. At the very least though, you got a good poem out of it.

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Sandy Player 24 December 2012

It's painful to see the inevitable coming early in the poem and then it being obvious and unavoidable at the ending. At the very least though, you got a good poem out of it.

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Matt Mooney 11 December 2012

Glad to have found your poems.10.

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Abaka Blessing Anastasia 11 December 2012

A sad ending rhyme. i wish u guys can be together. lines filled with passion. nice 1

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You are an amazing writer! The way your words dance on the page painting pictures in my mind! How alluring. Great write!

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Wulan Permata Puri 09 December 2012

All in one Sad Beautiful Poems

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Nasarudheen Parameswaran 04 December 2012

A hot tear on the mundane life.Nice

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Lyn Paul 01 December 2012

You are amzing to be sharing your notes. I hope that there is now pure sunlight in your life. So well written Hazel

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Jahan Zeb 30 November 2012

The intensity in the poem reveals the feelings the poetess had at the time of writing it. Very deep and touching Hazel. Marvelous wording and the imagery is of high qualities. Well done Hazel.

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Musfiq Us Shaleheen 29 November 2012

Well imagery and sad poem but you draw several images here.

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Owain Glyn 29 November 2012

Celt versus Celt, maybe the outcome was predetermined. Well expressed I shall try some of your other work. Thankyou.

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What a summit of poetic expressions! These broken pieces have made this piece a real literary gem of the kind. Nostalgic and lost in sweet reminiscences you have really re assembled a thing of beauty.

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