Sunday, March 15, 2009

Brittany Be My Girl Comments

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Greenwolfe 1962 17 March 2009

This is like a note. The repetition is the name Brittany. This adds memory to the written piece. I thought the last line was a good line. The piece is a short one, so it doesn't need a special ending because it is so focused. But the reference to happy is very, very important and carries a lot of the weight here. GW62

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