Monday, August 5, 2013

Breath Of Life Comments

Rating: 4.5

Gone was his breathing,
Gone were heart beats,
The silent pulses,
Screamed of his decease.
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Lucifera Santez
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Aniruddha Pathak 05 January 2019

A heart-felt poignant poem. I too had lost my daughter who died soon as she was born long years back, and then my father who died in my arm at the age of 102. Death is very touching, always, despite all the wisdom that we know about death being a liberator..

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Dr Antony Theodore 06 May 2016

Fighting my tears, Trying to be brave, I kneeled down to kiss him, But he still was dead. Soon he will go in ground, managing grief....... grief that remains with us always..... this is an experience......which at last leads us to God............ nothing is in our hands. God should come into our lives and help us in grief, in affliction. a great poem. tony

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Savita Tyagi 11 August 2014

A painful experience written with deep emotions. A courageous and heart touching write.

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Lyn Paul 11 August 2014

Pardon me Lucifera It would not allow me to save nor vote x

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Lyn Paul 11 August 2014

A heartfelt write that I have read sometime a go, this time I have saved it. Thank You Lucifera, I have saved this too.

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Aftab Alam Khursheed 11 August 2014

Shadows never vanish but lost somewhere within the mind...hummers well, nails and hangs, laugh and cry...continue...up to unending end..when thread of breath broken dream broken transforms into the dream of another mind...

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Jasbir Chatterjee 11 August 2014

I feel bad for you, Lucifera...Nothing can replace what you have lost...But then that's what life is all about...

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Amitava Sur 01 July 2014

A poignant melancholic poem written with beautiful expression, The vacuum was felt so intensely! ! ! Very nice, Lucifera.

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Susy Evelyne 27 November 2013

A searing and moving poem. It costs a lot to write such a poem but it is a tribute to you and the passing of your nephew.

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Leslee Kerketta 26 November 2013

Truly a vivid piece of work.

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Heather Wilkins 05 October 2013

a beautiful breathe taking poem. a terrible experience to deal with. I feel you.

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Mohabeer Beeharry 28 August 2013

A great piece of writing. The sadness combined with your eventual loneliness, Holding the body in your arms for the last time....oh my God. I feel it all through. Keep writing. Mohabeer Beeharry Read my last poem The Cross when you get time and comment please.

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Mark Dillon 11 August 2013

Beautifully written, I feel the pain and sorrow in your words, and am sorry for your loss.

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Lyn Paul 11 August 2013

Thank you for your notes about these words Lucifera though still too hard for you to bare. So so special to have had such a wonderful bond with your nephew. I hope your family are slowly healing. Jaime and Lu would be proud of your wonderful words in Poem of the Day Well done

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Vishal Sharma 08 August 2013

impressive and dedicative love it to the fullest

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Khairul Ahsan 08 August 2013

@Lyn Paul, You have spoken my mind. Thank you.

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Khairul Ahsan 08 August 2013

There are no words in any language that can console a grief stricken mother as you are. All I can pray is may God rest his soul in eternal peace and may He be with you in bearing this grief. Remembering, How a child looks, With his breath of life extinguished………………… These words break our heart too, Lucifera!

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R.j. Wynn 08 August 2013

I can only imagine. Great job on it.

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Hazel Durham 07 August 2013

A heart-rending poem with the harsh reality of your beautiful child dying with the raw emotions of your love for your child that will live forever. Excellent write!

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Lyn Paul 07 August 2013

Dear Lucifera I feel so much sadness reading these words this Breath of Life taken from a child is so hard to bare. Yet With all of the sadness it is written so beautifully. Please just remember you never have to be brave. Thank you, it is written so well with so much feeling I wish to save these words. A 10 for this beautiful child.

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