Breath Comments

the tone in this is GREAT! ! (still wish i could rate option would go past 10) -_-

Independence is important, how would we grow up without it? At sometime they have to sever the ties between us and them, because in the real world it's just us right, at least that's the way I see it... I love this poem because it rings true here and now, I just want them to let me free, is that so much to ask? I rate would rate this as priceless, but since that's not an option I'll just put 10.

That's actually quite inspiring. I like the underlying anger put forth. It sounds to me like the person has done you wrong, but somehow I feel, underneath it all, it's written a little in denial. I know I have said things just to make myself believe them, 'cause they weren't true. But I think I could learn from your poem. If I could feel that I could make it on my own...

breath..very important...if we forget it...that's the end :)