Boulder Comments

This is truly amazing Sean- you take a passive object and make it feel. A considerable achievement- every word and phrase fit perfectly and resonate.

Simply a masterpiece Ian

your writing has improved greatly my friend! this was stunning, not even one word was wasted here and all the images used were breath taking! excellent! ! HBH

Every image fits precisely here. The overall feeling of desolation comes through across the vast expanse of the desert as well as space as you attempt to contact the ' winter-hearted Luna, ' another boulder and romantic symbol with which you long to connect. Absolutely resplendent on a myriad of levels. What a deliciously morbid metaphor with that 'the virulent freeze and thaw..'

Your writing is quite good Sean. It is much more mature than one of your years might produce. Excellent imagery and imagination: Projecting your consciousness into the stone and sensing how it might feel and respond to its environment. A wonderful poem. Wishing you the best and keep up the writing. You are an excellent young poet. Hugh