Tuesday, January 27, 2009

Born Against: A Poet’s Poetic Sojourn Comments

Rating: 4.3

***Read Up 'The First Kiss' First...

A relationship had started, a love bond sealed; one I thought my life would need. It was good, went well and all was “swell”… But all good start comes to an end. I gave her my life; she WAS my life, understanding with trust… Could be my wife. No day goes by; she’s by my side… “Without you, love, I’ll shrink and die”.
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Louis Rams 27 January 2009

when reading this, i feel i'm going from a rapper to a dance tapper. it seems that you start off like a teen in the states then changes to australian with the word' bloke' so it makes it a bit harder for me to grasp the true meaning of what you're saying. this i feel is constructive criticism, so that poeople like myself can appreciate and understand what you are saying and feeling. but you seem to have put your soul into it, so i say ten

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Allan Macli Borges 27 January 2009

wow, its a experience to read it, there is great lines on it, my choice for now is '...like i was dead before we met'...beautiful

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