Blue Sees Another Bee Comments

this is a great sequel to an equally great prequel: Blue Sees A Bee. nice work Darlene! nice work Blue! ! bri :) both will go (arm-in-arm, or tail-in-tail) into my/our DECEMBER a showcase for PH poets, Section D [for LONGER poems], on my PH site. thanks 'Darla'. bri :)

I love your play on words about bees. I am afraid of them but I respect this insect. From a bee I would rather be free. Good.

Hi Bri, Thanks for your comment, I changed lays to lies as suggested, it does work better, but it took a long time to convince Blue to agree to the change. Yes it is dog speak, and Blue isn't too good with indefinite articles, therefor the lack of a in key places. I'm also not very good at English either, but it's what I have since I don't speak any other language. Blue has also watched a lot of Star Wars, in case you can't tell from the way he speaks, his favorite character is Yoda.

i laughed out loud (but not too loudly; my wife might be listening) at the ending. is the poem dog-speak or bear-speak? i've heard that bears eat bees as well as honey. i really enjoyed this after getting over the lack of a? after I see a bug, is it a bee....or is that supposed to read it is a bee? i guess i've seen some sentences in novels that sound like questions to me but lack question marks. hmmm? and maybe lies instead of lays? in Bee lays on ground, not very sly........oh well, dogs usually aren't english majors. - - - - - - - - i'm adding this to MyPoemList my favorite stanza is: Bee is bug, all bug are for me Bee is bug, it must NOT be free................BUT there were plenty of stanzas in the finals. thanks for sharing. i really like how you make the words and the word order work for you. and how you make it (i think) dog-speak. bri :)

Blue needs to chase cockroaches or bugs just as disgusting, like fleas. Bees are for me. They must be free! Great poem. Love the play on words.