Friday, August 1, 2008

Blood Instead Of Tears Comments

Rating: 5.0

It’s not easy to shed
Blood instead of tears
It takes along time to
Get what is destined
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Asif Baloch
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Seema Chowdhury 06 October 2008

a very touchy poem............ it touched my heart and soul. but you sounded very sad and in pain. Eid mubarak to you and your family.

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Joe Breunig 03 October 2008

An intriguing piece; personally, I prefer punctuation for smoother grammatical flow; when we apply God's Word & Principles to our lives, we are to be more than conquerors, so that we can more free shed tears of joy, rather than the blood from toiling. Be blessed and keep writing! -Joe

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Asif Andalib 29 September 2008

Masterly written although I do not agree with all the things you have said. A sudden severe shock or failure may also trigger the desire to shed blood So 9 for this piece.

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Gargi Saha 29 September 2008

Very sad indeed is man's life. A very miserable write. U get 10++

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Sarwar Chowdhury 29 September 2008

The trauma gyrating that I enjoy seeing as Inseperable indeed sorrow and joy untill death he or she. your expression fine! I am on line! giving u 10 vote-shine!

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Fay Slimm 29 September 2008

Eating agony - drinking pain - this is a very dark, strong poem. Well versed and reads slow with good wording. A Ten.

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Seema Aarella 29 September 2008

Tears, pain and grief...are the elements that touch u most and bring the best out of you...another moving work.

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Dr.Wardha Jawdat 28 September 2008

very very nice piece.i think this one as written while you were indeed in the throes of pain...it has that poignancy that accompanies pieces which are reflections of bits of your life...well done!

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Koyel Mitra 28 September 2008

A very sad write reflecting mental agony.Liked it.A 10!

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Ana Dasilva 28 September 2008

A very nice poem and so true...

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Tj Becker 28 September 2008

A sad write of a lonely tortured life.As we struggle day to day to survive and happiness refuses to show it's face to us. You penned this well, it had nice flow and excellent wording. A good write of a sad but realistic existence. Well done my friend. Keep up the great reads, .

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Marria Attar 26 September 2008

Very true...remarkable poem! thnx for sharing

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Emo Seb 22 September 2008

ur rite, this is an amazing poem. thanks

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William Jackson 17 September 2008

Blood instead of tears- intense imagery! Still you have a why to live. Otherwise you could not write such moving poetry. Sincerely, William

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I really enjoyed reading this poem. It's a great write. Peace out, Lexi Baby

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Ashraful Musaddeq 15 September 2008

A beautiful poem with nice imegery. Enjoyed. Last lines are wonderful.

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