Black Sun Comments

mate its very musical

this poem is unlike any ohter...in a good way thogh hahaa. keep up the good work

I believe that although the poem lacked in length, it made up for it with it's straightforwardness and fairly good vocabulary usage. I would recommend that you structure it better so it's not one big text block, although this poem was short enough to get away with it.

'And now I am lost The sun is dead My heart is shattered You're the reason, that to my eyes I live with the black sun' 10 for these beautiful lines.

Excellent writing Jessica...full of imagery...10+++

Im sorry, unique davis: P

JJ......you are my best friend, and this poem uniquely showcases your talents. I love it :) I agree with uniquely davis, this is beautiful poem.

Beautiful. I to have a black sun Great poem! ! ! 10+++