Black Ribbon Comments

Like those in earlier days who hid the fact of adoption from their children, preferring to pretend, so in this sad poem you share the awful consequences of concealment when tragedy touches a family. The black ribbon is strong symbol for the black tale you tell about a little girl who believed in a lie. An emotionally strong poem. Love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥

You set a wonderful atmosphere of foreboding, leaving the reader wanting more details of this mysterious and tragic death. -c

a touching write.I was almost in tears reading this.

this is a horror story where the monsters are real......

I thought there was a bomb in the box. The narration is excellent and gripping...

Hiding disturbing facts from children, only makes it harder to bear when the truth inevitably comes out. You have written a sad poem quite beautifully.

It is a gift not meant for her, but for her mother. And the gift turned out to be the truth not meant for her, the truth that is bitter. A thought provoking story.

A poetic drama packed with pathos and suspense till the end. CP

I agree with all: a touching, heartrending and thoughtful piece. Nicely done, Sandra. You do have a talent for the narrative. :)

A nice and unique story written and shared my friend....well delivered! Touching one indeed!

The poetically written story is like the one written by Edgar Alan Poe's! Interesting to read till the end!

Tragedy that cannot fail to move the reader. Beautifully written. The drama lingers on after the poem ends.10/10. Love, Sandra

Hamlet could not have stated more adequately how our intentions and actions (even from the grave) can be so impotent in the affairs of this life. moving as well as thought provoking piece, Sandra thanks, sjc

Well, this is an exceptionally well written poem, Sandra, with a marvellous story expressed beautifully and an aura of mystery to it that made in a most delightful read. Until your fine ending, I was expecting the package to be a bomb, so inculcated have we been with the threat of terrorists these days. What especially appealed to me in this great poem is that the mystery remains even after the poem ended. A very thought provoking and brilliant write! Carl.

mystery n pathos well blended...

A very touching and sad poem and the metaphor black ribbon is excellent. I guess it is a poem where one can draw their own conclusions as to where the father had been living. Nevertheless our children are so precious and my heart bleeds for her. Excellent! 10 love Karin

nice bulid up on your imagination Sandra...thanks...10

Sandra, a very heart wrenching and poignant story. Beautifully constructed and draws the reader to the sad conclusion. Top marks and thanks for sharing it with us. Hugs David

most poignant story yet i ever have read like this, pain seems redounds to sorrow heaving the blood to swoon on the altar of deathly silence, yet ingeniously curved across cry of innocence of lad, tear seems to reels through pain by love,10++++++, thanks for sharing

Now I shall be wondering...who was he... was he in prison...was he bad or good....nice work Sandra... Fond regards Alf