Black Heart Beat Red Comments

A tear that falls a scream that cries. A smile thats false and a hidden lie. A broken heart a laugh thats fake. very good lines. good job. Becca

i like this one too, your a great poet for your age

Another fine piece of poetry. Keep writing my friend, seems you have a gift! Regards, Leria

I ABSOLUTLEY LOVE IT....I'D HAVE TO AGREE WITH STEPHANIE....I WOULD NEVER BE ABLE TO WRITE AS GOOD AS YOU! YOUR WONDERFUL! ! .....AND I LOVE! HOW YOU WRITE! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! EXCELLENT WORK! ! ! I GIVE IT A TEN! ! THE RYTHM IS PRACTICALLY COMING TO ME! ! IT'S GREAT! ! !

wow! when i was 12 i never wrote like that! when you're my age you'll be a genius :)

Take this poem and live it, keep your spirits up.

that was pretty -ryan