Monday, November 28, 2005

Black And Blue Comments

Rating: 4.0

One Summer he asked me
to get his pack of cigarettes,
but I was not quick enough.
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Louise Marie DelSanto
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Phillip Whiteman 01 March 2006

I'm not sure, i do like where it goes but think it could be much stronger.

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Phillip Sawatzky 29 January 2006

Louise Marie-I don't know what made me leak more-the father's tempest raging against the child (you?) , or the lost child's (your) hopes found in the searchlights at night; the juxtaposition of the Lord's Prayer was a deft stroke. As sad as this poem is, it makes me happy to have read such thoughtful writing. Phillip

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Peter A. Crowther 27 January 2006

It is so sad to read about children being ill-treated and this poem shows how it must be for a child.

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Gregory Gunn 15 January 2006

Dear Louise, This one struck a few nerves in me to say the least. One extremely good aspect of poetry is its therapeutic nature.

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