Thursday, March 25, 2010

Black Actions Comments

Rating: 4.8

The black freezes solid
hard as ice
Time stops
Motionless I stand
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Alyssa Lippi
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Black actions...deceitful manifestations from the heart. So well penned, captivating read! ; D

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Alyce Haeven 28 April 2010

now THIS is something that people would add to there favorites! ! well done! !

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Jack Simone 23 April 2010

I really enjoyed this one. Seems like you put a lot into it.10/10

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Lynn Glover 19 April 2010

A very impressive poem written with almost life like action, you drew me into the poem as a good poet will do. You did an outstanding job on structure and flow. I give you a 10. Verrrrrry Goooood. Your friend Lynn

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you got such good comments on this..what else can i say.. but as you asked for it i can only say that..keep writing..'coz i know that the best is yet to come and for me it's too close but not that..

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Adrian Cordova 17 April 2010

10/10, it's really dark, and yet it shows it's not all you that's dark, the is perfectly written in ways of 'Goth' poetry, and a good poem in any other poetry genre

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Rinki Nandy 12 April 2010

that was really b; lack..

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Christopher Tiganescu 09 April 2010

wow that was amazing it seemed almost perfect good job!

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oh my! WHY U DIDNT KEEP ON WRITING....it was such a good flo with perfect words..... pls....try to write more here, , , , it's such a good piece...

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