Bitterness And Hate Comments

do not let bitterness and hate consume you. no one knows what your going thru. no one can see the pain you're in and what you feel is a crying sin.... no place in our life a hate n bitterness.. even if u have to hate.. hate self....10 read mine i am disgrace... never say die and good bye.. go to hell

Outstanding poem Louis!

I like the IDEA of this poem moreso than the poem itself. Maybe, it is because I am bothered by the lack of a specific syllabic scheme. Some of the lines are cliche-ish like 'no one knows what you're going though'. The rhyme scheme is off at the end, I guess because there are only three lines. I don't think the last stanza is needed. People don't really like being preached to through poetry. It is obvious about what will happen when you allow bitterness in your heart. I think the strongest line is 'stop! and give love a start' I consider myself a cruel critiquer, so take it as a compliment when I say that I consider this a lyrical poem, like an old country song from the 60's. I don't like many things, but I will give this poem that compliment.