Saturday, November 14, 2015

Beyond Death Comments

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“Where am I? ”

Have I been transferred to hospital during the night?
I raise my head. Before me is a seemingly endless row of cubicles, each containing a bed upon which some person lies. Each person wearing a helmet and wired and piped into the back wall.
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Paul Butters 22 November 2015

22\11\15: Have Revised this, making additions which I trust will make it clearer. On a cold reading I wasn't so sure so I embellished it. Now waiting for those revisions to appear above.

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Paul Butters 22 November 2015

Note to Self - Those Revisions Have appeared now. Job Done. :)

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Unwritten Soul 14 November 2015

You said..Technically a story but I hope poetic..... but i enjoyed it...so i am i in reality now hahahha..just joking :) please write the next page of this...

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