Have pity on the maverick calf
who flees his mother's milk
and shuns the circle of his herd -
drifting on through sage and hills -
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Robert, Denis is right. Your poetry is refreshingly original, without ever lapsing into cliche. It's also comfortably accessible. So much 'good' poetry tends toward obfuscation. A robust little poem with a bright heart and a sprinkling of irony. love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥
Thanks D J for the suggestion on the fifth line. I have fixed the line as a result.
How good it is to both read and hear your poems Robert. I think that the opening line shows your mastery of poetry. It would have been so easy to write ' Pity the...' The fact that you open it in the manner you do avoids cliche but also make the opening agressive rather than passively appealing. There is a feeling of jocularity about the piece and there is so much to read into it (political?) . But it is the sense of timing that gives the poem its flow and make the experience. I have to say that I am not (at this moment) sure about the last line of the first stanza! ! ! ! ! ! ! !
Unbranded mooses (meese?) seem in greater danger than Alaskan cattle. Still, your point is well taken. It seems unsporting to brand mavericks from a helicopter. Lasers are inaccurate from a certain distance. Your wise and very, um, um, offbeat take on current events: I think your baton is accurate, but the orchestra is watching SNL YouTubes. Cheers. - Will