Saturday, October 7, 2006

Berry Of Blue Comments

Rating: 2.5

We talk together,
My smile, your eyes,
We eye our smiles,
My eyes on your eyes,
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Jonzo Bandwagoner
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Sophia White 10 October 2006

The first stanza is great, and so is the second, but it's cool how its makes you grow all turbulent - then 'life is fun'. Very surprising ending. Like it.

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Landrey 09 October 2006

especially the first stanza-strikingly poinient. I love it, keep up the brilliance! ! -landrey

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Jonzo Bandwagoner

Jonzo Bandwagoner

Huntington, NY
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