Beloved's Betrayal Comments

Hi Ms Bakuli, Wonderful flow of words. Very beautifully crafted. Loved the poem.

Ammmazzing

Alliteration and rhyme at it's fullest here perhaps.. On a first glance, I felt, this was a 'weird' poem, but it took me a few readings to let the whole thing seep in nicely.. You begin with cheerful words and gradually move towards the sadness of betrayal.. The word 'trust' is used five times, followed by 'feelings' and 'restless' (twice each) .. The words 'love' and 'hate'; 'shame' and 'shamelessness' are used in oposition to each other... Structurally speaking, this is actually one of best composed poems I have read in a long time.. The poem uses all devices available to express the meaning(s) it wants to convey and makes the best of all of them... Thank you very much for sharing Bakuli.. It's a unique poem and one worth cherishing...

Wow.. This your poem is beautiful and well thought. Good work friend

Brilliant write with a good message, I like the message behind the beautiful flow of lines. Amazing...

Bakuli bhakali Keep writing.............

Trust trailed, Fate failed. Flower fade, Restless raid. Betrayal of the lover. love'rain and the flood of woes. very powerful expressions of love and the experience of betrayal. thank you very much

Beautiful! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! the words and.........

The lovely song of rain changes to flood of woes at the lover's betrayal.Perhaps there was no love at all.A heart touching poem on love and betrayal..

Bride danced strings caged dreams shaded morrows pranced.

You stringed this together nicely.