Beginning Of The End Comments
Is this how it begins?
The final decline into helplessness?
This morning I had the hardest time
getting my fingers to cooperate
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Dear LeeAnn, thank you for your comment, but don't bother praying for me. Pray for something worthwhile, such as world peace.
Old age, and related complications are hard realities of life.We have to face it on someday or other.You still have the cowboy spirit.I liked the last three lines.
I will pray for you Cowboy I really am thinking of death of a friend
Please, think about this, will you? Thank you for sharing such an amazing poem about 'old age' If I may say so.
Dear Sylvia, thank you for your multiple comments, but WHAT exactly am I supposed to think about? Go to the Netherlands and live in a retirement home there? (At least you could come and visit me!)
You have written such an amazing poem, but a very sad one, but honestly worded.
THREE: Persons can lead their own style/way of living, much freedom, but the house is not as big as in the USA, but it is included in the Healy=th Care
TWO: in this place/home there is optimum freedom, own choice in all things, this kind of care is included in the Health Care
ONE: Dear Ron, tears are flowing upon my tears, you wrote a vert sensitive poem, which deserves TOP Marks. In the Netherlands there is an option for persons who are in this stage, just like you
Bri, you were correct about the word 'foibles'. Thanks. I have changed that line, but PH is slow on showing changes nowadays.
Very well stated. I like the rhyming in the last stanza and the alliteration in the penultimate.
(cont.) I'll call the night/respite pair a 'visual (by eyesight) rhyme', NOT an 'aural (by hearing) rhyme'. 'Night' & 'respite' are pronounced differently [I believe]. : ) bri
CORRECTION.......of something I, Bri, said' ...............Ron does NOT have 'night'/'respite' in his poem as I MISTAKENLY had reported. I'm sorry, Ron. I HAVEN'T YET FIGURED OUT WHO DID! ! ! : (
You are correct that those two words do NOT rhyme, but they are found nowhere in my poem, so put down that bottle and don't drink any more today!
Some favorite lines: 'A change, a word, and their love unwinds. They turn away, leaving me in night, Alone, in pain, without respite' (cont,)
Bri, what have you been drinking? I think you intended this comment to go on someone else's poem, as those lines are NOT in MY poem!
Suicide IS an option for me, but I've never tried it. I might 'screw it up! ! '. While I still feel at all 'useful' to others, I plan to continue living, but.......there may 'come a time' when other issues outweigh ANY usefulness I can offer others! : ) bri
(cont,) 1 - A weakness or eccentricity of character [[NOT a physical weakness]] &...2 - the weaker part of a sword blade : (
Stanza 5: a super example of the use of alliterations! ! F F F F F F & F! ! ! I love it, BUT I dare to say I believe your use oi 'foibles' is not true to the 'foible'-definitions I found while I researched the word. (cont,)
Read the last stanza carefully, Wesley, and your question will be partially answered. Thanks for commenting.
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7/19/2025 3:00:32 AM # 1.0.0
OOPS! ! ! I erred in thinking the words 'night' & 'respite' were in THIS poem. Mea culpa***! ! [*** 'Mea culpa, which means 'through my fault' in Latin, comes from a prayer of confession in the Catholic Church. Said by itself, it's an exclamation of apology...' ]