Friday, July 27, 2007

Before Nightfall Comments

Rating: 4.0

sunset crashes down
on houses, I hear voices
of the day around me
the alarm clock from
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Ben Partenay
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Steffi Webster 09 August 2007

I particularly like the use of the phrase 'the whispers are just leaves falling from trees'. It strikes me as an interesting and thought provoking line in a poem likewise riddled with such depth and thought. Another outstanding acheivment Ben. Well done!

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RyuOh Kenshin 27 July 2007

very nice, I like the line 'I walk into the sunset still crashing down into shadows'

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