Before I Cross The River Comments

i see the imagery.... my mind travels through plains and mountains along riversides

A very vivid use of metaphor Will encouraging the darkened souls to take bold steps in life to rise again. A very tempting poem towards bravery with motivation so pure and so beautiful to wash out the lethargy that otherwise overwhelms the deadened minds. The essence of poem is ingrained with a very special message of gaining the glory without fear of the hurdles because the excellence has always been achieved by those who dare to believe that something inside them is far more superior than the circumstances...... Best Regards naseer

extremely ambigous and i loved it.keep on penning good stuff bro.

very well described and powerful, the use of words is brilliant!

Darn good Will, glad I finally discovered your poetry. Zen

loved this poem, well put together, and nicely penned.

How to speak so much in so few words.... I wish to have a dose of your exemplary way of using words to their maximum benefit. A most dark read.... gripping stuff! HG: -) xx

This feels like the work of someone who's had a whiff of the subject, and the heightening of the senses that comes with it - making the meadow so much more attractive than ever before! Strong imagery, deft use of language.

Will, I've been here before, but it was so good I had to come back. From end to end it's brilliant. The language choice is so effective as well - in line 2 I would have made a hash of it by choosing 'beyond' instead of 'behind' but that would have weakened the atmosphere you've generated here - and 'How fair the meadow is' is stunning. Simply stunning writing all round. jim

Choosing life is sometimes very difficult..but as you say ' ' There is a river here; Always, there is a river Just when Death scents victory....' There is hope and there is life A beautiful poem Wishiing you joy Pia

I've forgotten how I got here. Probably via South east Texas. Loved this. No, I'm awed!

Another powerful write, great story Will, excellent read--Melvina--

Hi Will....very thought provoking. Is the river being crossed - Death? Is the meadow -Heaven? ...like it....B

Mysterious. I don't get it exactly but I love it.

this is a nice poem eventhough there is smell of death

Dear Will, The imagery you have threaded through out 'Before I Cross the River' is very well done and the poem has great rhythm and flow, a lovely read for a bitter sweet theme. I also liked the way you use contrast.The effect of the imagery of the white cleansing waters against the black rock adds a bit of spiritual depth to the poem. The poem has a bit of an Emily feel for me. Great job! Blessings ~ Debora

Great write Bill... a full story in short verse... a 10!

Wonderful imagery depicted in this dark dreamscape. I am glad that the rider reached the meadow in spite of all the difficulty. Very inspiring, Will. Kindest regards, Sandra