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Excellent poem. Well written with great detail. Enjoyed.

The gift of life is here portrayed with insight and realism!

nice entrance into the light. well written piece of poetry

Oh to be born, our rare and solemn gift of life and its most unlikely occurrence, beautifully portrayed.

This is powerful. The words sort of fell off the page for me, nice flow. I especially enjoy the ending.

Very Clever Val, you show many different styles of writing.

Beyond the boundary, muffled sounds soft and tender, could be heard. Sighs, laughter, and I longed to see from where they came, yearning for sight to penetrate opaque lids... wao love to read these lines, searching the way from darkness to light..great one

There is true beauty in this piece, a new life, a new dawn.

Wonderful Val.Love this style of write!

Birth the first ultimate test like deaths the last. A really good description of ones entry into the world, well done 10/10 BB : O)

Like a previous poem of yours Val I had to go back over it again, and then I got the Eureka moment! I like your new style of writing on this poem and it has made it more intriguing too. Nice one.

I was engrossd in dis absorbing poem very sublimely crafted in an emotive way like waking frm a dreamlike phase.

Something quite different from your usual vein, but replete with punching emotions! Some lines leave a special mark like - - All was well in this universe, where quiet waves licked against unseen shores In this context I invite you to read my poem- The Great Escape, almost similar in theme though different in treatment! The first poem I ever wrote

Ahso, Kicking and screaming,10/4

fist stanza about being in womb (It was dark, I was immersed in a fluid world, so small within its depths) as relatives and parents wait baby moves and kicks and finally into the light / here a great message in simple way life it self find the way from darkness to light /please come from darkness to light / lovely poem Valerie deserve 10

A really fantastic poem, a great build up to a fantastic ending.

A finest construction for the prcision and depth of images in the strong feminist context!

The tranquil beauty of floating in a huge ocean and then the pangs of birth. Another lovely poem Val.

Storm unfolding... Things happen all of a sudden. Imagination or reality! Nice poem.

An amazingly imaginative write replete with, if I may say, felt sensations- so vivid is your depiction from forming [immersed in a fluid world] to turbulence [undulating, seizing, pushing] to emergence from darkness [kicking and screaming]. Simply wonderful, Val.