*because Of Love Do Not Entrap Comments

Rising his hand the boy offered- 'Beauty, come near, Thy dear Sit on my hand Want to love thee until end.’ Well penned the interaction between a boy and a bird.Really excellent sir.....

wow beautiful poem vote 10

Sarwar, I have read your poem [.......... Entrap]. Remove the word 'were, ' as you don't need it. And 'her, ' as we already know the bird's a she. Instead of 'reddish small' it sounds better to say 'small reddish, ' as small is the stronger adjective. And would this line fit: 'Besides a black glowing nose'? It's a weird depiction I get. When you get to the part where you're talking to the bird in biblical or Shakespearean or old-time poets' language, you threw me off a bit. Why is the conversation so old-fashioned? 'Thou'? Is that how a bird talks or someone talks to the bird? Does the bird read Shakespeare? But besides that, wonderful description. I liked it very much. Kaye Cee

Beauty and love can never be entrapped, if untainted and pure. You definitely have discovered and shared such serenity, freedom and joy in life that I must say can only be reincarnated after a great struggle and exploration of our inner self. Great piece of poetry, comparable to great romantics… Regards, Kamran

written with beauty of words...

poetry of the highest quality 10+

A poem story with great meaning, , , , , , , , , , , well written

wow, the fluid use of language is absolutly marvelous! I love the way how the deeper meaning is hidden in such a seemingly bright poem.

'if you love someone let them go'....youve captured and tamed a lovely thought through this piece...well done..! thanks for sharing!

Thy so quick, thou elan love, May come near on proviso- Do not try to entrap me, So that I can love thee until death Love it! love it! love it! ! ! ! rate 10

love and not owning, somewhat unconciously we do and need entrap ourselves we find liberty in that love don't entrap beautifully written

a concept trite...but u have chisled it so magnificiently...an epitome of child's innocence and love's vast and selflessness...the vital freedom, nourisher of love! all expressed in a brilliant flow...!

really sweet and down to a certain point.

finely detailed! ! a true work of art!

well posed, well written, finley executed

Great poem and a beautiful story merge into one..It brings smile to my lips while reading your piece..a lift on my heart..Love finely written and describe.....I'm giving this a 10...God bless

endless clap from me man really it's so wonderful poem. tnx for the lines tnx for the words tnx for the fantasy and tnx for the love and tnx for ur mind.

This poem is very nice. The lines are beautiful

Let the wings of love unfold Liberty of beauty expressed in a way never told Another diamond culled out from the depths of your mind.

very nice and lovely composition.