as your breath grows hollow and thin
the hand ticks the circuit of death
awaiting the moment you leave in sin
a life not yet forgiven
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this is such a good poem, it makes you think about how wonderful death is :)
This is beautiful... you make death seem like nothing really... Good Job **Tyease**
after reading this for me you are really one of the greatest poets. Keep it up....
Excellent text, Rocco. A 9 for sure. It would appear that you are getting serious about your poetry. Although whimsy has its place, too. Note spelling 'lose' control. Keep writing!
No words could describe how much i love this poem A job well done check some of mines out
Ha, my mother is mostly blind, and I am mostly death, so I could relate to this poem, quite a lot. Good job.