Sunday, September 30, 2007

Beauty In Sinking Ships Comments

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Sometimes, bitterness inundates your heart
Until illumination is sapped left to right
Finally you’re realizing what has just happened
As you’re on your way down, Alone
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Aiden Florence
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Hunter Hunters 19 November 2013

I was searching for a poem on sinking ship and i found your, and its excellent. I also have a work on sinking ship you can enjoy it.

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Rebekah Gamble 02 July 2008

It's obvious that you've worked on this. I admire how you pull the poem together through repetition and that you've made an emotion without end fit into the boundaries of four lines to a stanza. What is said can be focused on better because of these characteristics, and that is deathly important, because what you have to say is serious and should be heard. Excellent work.

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Janelle Morehart 01 October 2007

Wow...really all I can say is wow. That give's such vivid images. Darkness and sorrow. Yet the will and striving to survive, to struggle on through life and to love. Lovely piece, you're quite the artist. I commend you on a job well done!

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